1. Every year the school holds an international culture festival that welcomes students from different…

Questão

1. Every year the school holds an international culture festival that welcomes students from different countries. 2. The festival features food stalls, performances, and workshops where participants can share traditions and learn from each other. 3. Students who want to volunteer for the workshops will need they to fill out the volunteer application form and submit it before the deadline. 4. The form is going to be provided online through the school website and it must be completed accurately to secure a spot. 5. Volunteers will receive training and a certificate of participation after the event. Analise the draft announcement above. Which revision of sentences 3 and 4 best improves clarity and conciseness without omitting essential information?

1. A) Those wanting to help with workshops should fill out the volunteer application on the website; the form must be accurate and on time.
2. B) Students who want to volunteer must accurately complete and submit the online application form on the school website before the deadline.
3. C) Volunteers need to fill out an online form accurately and submit it to secure a spot; the deadline and website details are provided.
4. D) If students wish to volunteer, they should download the paper form and submit it to the office by the deadline.
5. E) Students may volunteer by submitting the online form before the deadline, and volunteers will get training afterward.

✅ Resposta correta: alternativa B

Resolução passo a passo

1. O problema das frases 3 e 4 é que elas repetem a ideia de formulário e prazo, e a frase 3 tem um erro gramatical ('will need they'). Uma boa revisão deve corrigir o erro, juntar as duas ideias e manter as informações essenciais: quem pode se inscrever, o formulário de inscrição, o modo de envio (online, pelo site da escola), a exigência de preencher com precisão e o prazo.
2. A alternativa B cumpre essas exigências em uma única frase: 'Students who want to volunteer must accurately complete and submit the online application form on the school website before the deadline'. Ela corrige o erro gramatical, elimina a repetição e mantém quem pode se inscrever, a exigência de precisão, o envio, o site e o prazo.
3. A alternativa A é concisa, mas omite a ação de enviar o formulário, que é essencial para a inscrição.
4. A alternativa C mantém os detalhes, mas fica mais longa e vaga ao dizer 'the deadline and website details are provided', sem informar o prazo nem o site concretamente.
5. A alternativa D muda as informações do texto original, ao trocar o formulário online por um formulário em papel entregue na secretaria, o que não está no enunciado.
6. A alternativa E deixa de lado a exigência de preencher com precisão e o objetivo de garantir a vaga, e mistura a informação sobre treinamento, que pertence à frase 5.
7. Por isso, a melhor revisão é a B, que coincide com o gabarito oficial.

💡 Dica: Compare as opções e preserve os detalhes essenciais enquanto elimina redundâncias.

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