Read the short opinion below (about local activities). Then write a revised concluding paragraph (2–3…

Questão

Read the short opinion below (about local activities). Then write a revised concluding paragraph (2–3 sentences, 40–60 words) that improves coherence by using at least one connector of addition, one of contrast, and one of conclusion. Text: "Our town park hosts many free activities for teenagers. However, attendance has fallen recently. Some argue the schedule is inconvenient for students who work after school. Others say the park lacks sufficient advertised events." Write the new concluding paragraph.

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Resposta esperada

However, attendance can improve if organizers adjust times to fit students' schedules; moreover, better promotion would reach young people after work. Therefore, the town should coordinate event hours with student availability and increase targeted advertising to ensure existing free activities benefit more teenagers.

Explicação

A conclusão revisada utiliza conectores de adição ("mais"), contraste ("no entanto") e conclusão ("portanto") para estabelecer uma relação clara entre as ideias. Isso melhora a fluidez do texto, permitindo que o leitor compreenda facilmente as sugestões para aumentar a participação dos adolescentes. Além disso, apresenta soluções práticas que abordam as preocupações levantadas anteriormente.

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